With a penchant for quilled nouns
and barbed adjectives,
a bitter cherry wine
pours forth its mind.
Glass shatters; shards fly
across the sea.
Ocean waves lull;
the balm of sea song
soothes the sting.
Waters fold, crescendo,
calm churning tides of strife
into foamy, deep flowing currents.
Open the mind, soul
to the voice of fullness
in the dry desert of the day.
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Submitting for Open Link Night #17 at d’Verse Poets. Thanks d’Verse, for a great place to hang out, share and read others’ work. I’m lovin’ it. 🙂
wayside word garden 
A wonderful poem with so much motion in it…besides the obvious waves.
“quilled nouns and barbed adjectives”….that has so much going there.
This poem is layered and complex, but also tangible. Evocative of reader’s experience. I believe strongly that this connection makes for the best of poetry, as it speaks universally.
Lady Nyo
Thank you, Lady Nyo.
Love this originality:
“With a penchant for quilled nouns
and barbed adjectives,
a bitter cherry wine
pours forth its mind.”
Piercing words in the desert of the day! Very well done!!
Thank you, Gay.
LOVE the title and how your bring it into play at the end. Beautiful word weave that reads outloud perfectly!
Thank you, Natasha.
lovely…i usually retreat to the woods for my serenity, but a couple times of year i go to the sea and let the rhythm of the waves reset my internal motion…great capture..
I prefer the woods too, much more accessible, as well… I haven’t been to the sea in a couple of years…so I had to try to remember how peaceful and calming it can be…
think we all know these desert days..and can be hard to …Open the mind, soul
to the voice of fullness…sometimes..good to be reminded..thanks for this..
Thank you, Claudia.
What great sounds and images, the motions of the sea really drive the poem!
Thank you, C.L.!
I love this…Open the mind, soul
to the voice of fullness
in the dry desert of the day…..just lovely!
Thank you, ayala!
Thsoe desert days can creep up out of nowhere, great verse.
They can, can’t they! Thank you, Pat.
That is exactly what a dry desert would need….nice one.
Thank you, Jerry.
Very good job here, lots of imagery and yes a lot of movement as well. The stanza with the shards fly is my favorite here, but the waters fold, crescendo stanza is very close as well. Enjoyed the poem, thanks:)
Thank you for your kind comment!
A very satisfying drink, particularly in the taste of that final poetic drop. Lovely imagery, with a smooth, delicate flow.
Thank you for that kind comment, Chris.
..sharp and creates a great colours to my ears..
Waters fold, crescendo,
calm churning tides of strife
into foamy, deep flowing currents.
..this is totally affecting, thanks for the poem.
Good day.
~Kelvin
Thank you, Kelvin.
I liked it very much… the words are perfectly formed in the vivid image…
“Open the mind, soul
to the voice of fullness
in the dry desert of the day.’
… are the lines to which I relate very much.. thanks for sharing..
Shashi
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/11/whispers-tears-in-rain.html
Thank you, Shashi.
I like the first stanza a great deal too, it has a “slings and arrows” feel to it with the “barbs and quills.” I almost expected the feather imagery to return. I enjoyed how the first stanza’s wine poured into the second stanza, too.
Thank you, Kathy.
Lovely and lyrical– thanks so much for stopping by. I especially loved:
Open the mind, soul
to the voice of fullness
in the dry desert of the day.
Thank you so much!
First poem that I have read today and it opened my mind, soul and eyes. having started the day on the right foot…
Cheers,
Mark Butkus
So glad you found it so! Thank you for your visit.
For me, the poem captures the ‘fakery’ and meaness experienced in everyday life…and the need to rise above it all. Nicely penned and put together.
You’re on the right track… pretty close to what I was thinking. Nice job interpreting my poem! 😉
Oh, what a beautiful poem…
words and poetry… my lifeboat
Thank you, Patricia.
Love the colours and the imagery… drawn to the desert sky… thank you for sharing.
Thank you for reading, Shelley.
Lovely flow here. I like the way this moves one to calmness. Well done.
Thank you, Joanne.
This is a very tight poem which I think works well because of its sharp images and precise styling from stanza to stanza. The ending leaves me down a little if only because you move from the very concrete to the abstract. Well done overall.
Thank you for for sharing, Charles. Yes, it moves from concrete to abstract, yet it was my intention. Appreciate your comment.
All that water — and then the desert. Good poem.
Hmmm… your comment makes me think. 🙂 Thank you for that, and thanks for your kind comment.
As a fellow lover of the sea, this poem is a song that lulls me towards waves today.
Sometimes the wine seems bitter cherry.
Sometimes it feels the barbs do sting.
But the voice of stillness ever reigns.
Beautiful!!
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